My Pitch: Incredibles 2 - Z Factor

My Pitch!

Incredibles 2 – Z Factor's version

Hello, ladies and jenklefins, Z Factor here!

So, I had a few problems with the Incredibles 2. Don't get me wrong! I liked what we got and I enjoyed the movie! (Read my other article on my analysis of the film, whether it disappoints or not.) However, the film-maker and story-writer in me just...wasn't satisfied completely.

The main problem I had was the superheroes being illegal story-line, and it being the crux of the story. I found it uninteresting and unoriginal, in my opinion. Plus, one of the things I liked most about the Incredibles movie was how it dealt with the heroes on the human level of being a family, and very human and personal issues, especially with the villain.

In short, here's my pitch...

The movie opens just as the superhero family are taking down the Underminer. Except, it's not illegal. It's perfectly legal and everything is happy and good. It's made known to the viewer that superheros are legal, and more of them are coming out of hiding. Helen and Bob receive an invitation to a party at Edna Mode's mansion, a celebration victory for superheros, and she wants to promote her business of making super suits.

At this party, Helen is reacquainted with an old friend and superhero colleague, Evelyn (Yes, I am using the villain name from the actual movie!). They haven't seen each other since they went other ground and it's a touching moment. Evelyn can read minds and has telekinesis. She also has the ability to control people's minds, but Helen disapproves of Evelyn doing this, but she disagrees. Her superhero name is Eyeris. (Get it? Because she can do things with her eyes. Superhero-name puns!) Evelyn meets Bob and all of Helen's kids and is welcomed.

Helen and Evelyn go on a mission together and bond, while Bob tries to manage things with the kids. On this mission, Evelyn tells Helen her sad back story. Evelyn still did secret hero work even when she was underground. Except, during one of her missions, things went really wrong very quickly and she blew her cover. In order to clean it up, the secret superhero agency (the one Mr. Dicker works for) had to relocate Evelyn away from her family. Evelyn lost her husband and daughter, and hasn't seen them since then.

Helen decides to help Evelyn find her family again. While Helen is helping Evelyn, Bob is struggling with the kids and is slowly realizing how hard Helen's mom job is. And Jack-Jack has powers, etc from the other movie.

Eventually, Helen and Evelyn find her old family. Except, her husband thought Evelyn died when the agency covered everything up. So he remarried and had two more kids. Evelyn watches with heartbreak as her husband and daughter are happy with their family.

Helen doesn't know what to do as they return home, Evelyn isn't the same now. She talks to Bob and he says she probably just needs time and space. Meanwhile, Bob is relieved that Helen is back.

Soon after, a dark vigilantly springs up on the news, taking out important government officials and agents. Bob and Helen discover that those people were all connected to when superheroes became illegal, or dealt with the secret organization who took Evelyn away from her family.

Helen says she has to deal with Evelyn herself, and asks Bob to stay with the kids. Bob begrudgingly stays with the kids, also knowing it's what he has to do. Helen finds that Evelyn is the dark vigilantly, using her powers of mind-control and mind-reading in order to get into the government and have revenge. Helen tries to talk to her but it does no good, and Evelyn decides Helen's family with be her own family.

Evelyn has controlled Bob, Violet, and Dash as her new family. Helen must stop her best friend in order to save them. (Side note: It's because of Evelyn's vigilante acts, that the government has been worried about making superheros legal once more.) Helen struggles, when Jack-Jack breaks free of the mind-control, because he has so many powers including that. Helen realizes he has powers and eventually the family gets out from Evelyn's control.

With the help of all the other superheroes that are legal, come out of hiding, and are very new, they stop Eyeris. They put a special helmet on her head so she can't use her mind powers.

While Eyeris is contained in her cell, Violet comes to visit her. Violet was the closest to Eyeris since she felt they had things in common. Eyeris convinces Violet to let her go. Then, in the climax of the film, Eyeris uses Violet as a way to escape the prison. While trying to escape, Helen finds them.

Eyeris goes into Helen's mind, but Helen uses her powers against her, by showing everything Eyeris has done. Eyeris is conflicted by her own monstrous actions. Eyeris lets Violet go, knowing she's not going to get her daughter back. Helen and Evelyn have a tender moment, as Evelyn has truly repented from everything she's done, seeing the damage of her actions upon the people she cared about.

While Evelyn is getting help in her special cell in the super-villain complex, getting therapy and treatment, and so forth, Helen sees how much she loves her family. She had been away from it for a while, and missed them. Bob also realized how important her job was, and appreciated Helen for everything she had done. Helen decides to stay with the kids for a while, and Bob says they can take turns, because he's okay to stay at home or go be a superhero, because parenting is also being a superhero.

The movie ends with both Helen and Bob knowing the value of family, one of them staying home. They've also seen the struggles of having such immense power, the temptations of making people do whatever you want, and the balance it takes to not abuse that power. Just because you have powers doesn't mean you'll always choose the right path, and it takes a strong character to use their strength wisely. And it also takes great strength and character to be a good parent.

That's my pitch for the Incredibles 2! What did you think? Did you like my version? What would your version look like?

-Z Factor